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Friday, October 19, 2018

My Recount

Today 15/10/18 in Rimu we have been doing recounts and today we have created one based on a video that we have watched I will be very grateful if you could leave feedback on how you think I did. Thank You - Maddie.





This is the video I wrote a recount is but we had to make up how it ends.

it was a sunny happy Saturday Morning and...
 Dad had to go to work, again! and, guess what
 I had to stay at my granddad's he is the most
t boring person ever with a boring house boring
car and even a boring lawnmower I know that sounds
(weird but believe me he does.)
I slowly look up once we get to his Boring house he
towers over me he picks me up then puts me down
on a box and then does the law but suddenly I saw a
box with photos written on the top of the box in sharpie
with bold bright booming letter staring at me. there was a
bright red wagon surrounded with pictures of what looked
like grandad and my dad, dad looked happy and he was sitting
in the wagon. I tried looking at a picture and by accident hit out a
helmet that looked like the one that my dad was wearing in the
photo it seemed to roll outwear my grandad was mowing the lawns
and he  stumbled over to where I was sitting he smiled so kindly and
his had started to point at the wagon so I got in the wagon and put my
helmet on that looked like a red strawberry in summer. The all of a sudden,
of we, went down the street.

I look around at the trees and grandad glares  and points
to a pitch black monkey with evil red eyes staring at us I
hear them the monkeys call in the distance all of a sudden
we are being chased  by what looked like hundreds of them
but I wouldn't know I only know how to count up to 15 there
is a pointy cliff and we continue running but there is no where
to go we slide off the cliff and.. We land with a splat and the  bright
red wagon is now a deep brown wooden boat but there are now
crocodiles snapping at us with red glowing eyes and scaly green skin like a
lizard crawling around you with pointy razor-like teeth but the boat is to fast
for them and the stop trying to eat  us up and I spin around and give my grandad
a high five but then there's is the steepest scars rocky waterfall flying at us like a rocket.




We land at the bottom of the
waterfall with a splat and  then we
were in a plane flying high in the sky
near the sun and clouds, we were
having an amazing time  not a care
in the world the plane flying higher
and higher like a ships sail then we
started to run out of fuel  the beeping
of the fuel light making a noise like a bomb we have to jump on
three one...two...three.. JUMP! We were
falling and falling, Minutes later a parachute
opens from our backpacks the shape and color
like a peppermint we keep failing the I see a park
me and grandad exchange looks and head down that way finally we land safely in the park.




We are drinking some water and we start
to hear strange sounds like a piglet at a farm it
was the aliens, there skin like slime and there
eyes like black holes about to swallow us there grins
cheeky and sly.  They start to shoot lasers like a
red-hot fire at us, grandad driving the rocket and
I'm shooting them with my mini laser gun the aliens
get faster and faster then finally We defeat all of the
aliens and see dads car DAD! I scream we zoomed
over there and we were so happy to see him, I gave
grandpa a huge hug and got into my car seat and started to fall asleep.

In the morning I wake up feeling refreshed
and happy the sun was shining and I smelt the
smell of pancakes in the kitchen, what could be'
better but I kept missing grandad because he had such a cool house and car and lawnmower! I couldn't wait to see him again and see what other adventures we would have.


What I found challenging was that it was hard to always use disriptive words I I am proud of how I did with base this on the video.

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