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Friday, September 21, 2018

My Narrative



 Kia Ora Bloggers!
This is my  Narrative that I have made. I really enjoyed this and I will enjoy reading your comments and please give me some feedback. What do you think I could do better? What was your favorite part?  How else could I present my work?

Wednesday, September 19, 2018

My StoryBird

on Thursday last week I and a few others in class went to the student summit, My favorite thing to do there was story bird and I decided to share it with you, The thing that I found difficult was learning how to do scratch the game maker.

















































Please tell me what you think of my Storybird and what I could write about next.


Wednesday, September 12, 2018

The Ending Of The Ice Palace

 Kia Ora Bloggers!

In Rimu we have been  reading the Ice Palace and we finally got to the end, It was a very twisted ending and I would really recommend the book. Everyone sat down and listened to the book, then we had to write our own paragraph about what you think is going to happen.

This is the sentence starter: Ivan Clapped a hand to his mouth stifling a cry he was looking at.

This is my paragraph to end the story.


Ivan Clapped a hand to his mouth stifling a cry he was
looking at ….. Something colder than winter, colder than Ivans
land, something colder than Starjiks heat. Horrified a thousand lifeless
eyes glaring at him almost like they were begging Ivan to help, to help
them get away from the child taker. Tears sprang to his eyes like winter
to spring running down his cold red cheeks, Suddenly a frail boney stiff hand
latched onto his pocket yanking his diamond tears from his pocket that the
old women gave to him on his way  Ivan was confused as Starjik glared into his
hand with his eyes bulging from his head, Ivan started to feel sick , his head
spinning and stomach-turning ” NOOOOOO “ his tears gone the only hope left to
save his brother but worried on what Starjik would do next he slowly
backed away but as fast as light itself Starjik held his hand tightly and
pulled it into him  he made a fist and shoved Ivan onto the ground, as cold
as the crisp air tears sprung into his eyes sliding down his cheek and falling
to the ground, the rough ground tearing at his flesh and ripping it away, but Ivan
needs his brother to be safe needs him to stay alive and needs him to be free,
free from this nightmare.


Ivan starts to lose hope, he cannot save his brother no matter how
hard he will try no matter what. Terrified and hopeless Ivan starts to
cry knowing that he won't see him again never ever again we'll never
see him free. The swift tears swivel down his cheek and make a clink
on the ground. But that sound that one clink gave Ivan all of his hope back
he has tears the tears that will save his brother, he slashes the ground  
pulling them into his hand he pulled himself up and throws the tears onto
him burning him into his face, the fire raging and Ivan racing to find
something to let his brother free.


Finally he finds a box of matches it was so tiny  but that tiny box can
save thousands of children's lives he opened it slowly  making sure not drop to them
, but there was only one how could one match free that many lives from the cage of
coldness, Ivan breathed in an icy breath and lit the match the flame
spoke almost if it was saying freedom, he through it at the huge ice cage
it spun in the air like a million fireflies and landed on his brother.

Stumbling he goes to get a cup and pours the water
once on him when he was breathing again he yanked him
from the cage and hugged him with all his might and whispered
in his ear come on we need to save the others all of the others,
 they ran to the village the snow slowing down not able to keep up
with them, the run faster and faster like lightning to get to the village
, they needed to find help they sprint and sprint around trying to find
someone anyone the run back with the others but Starjik wasn't there but they
knew he would come back but now all the wanted to do was sleep they could finally sleep.


Please comment on what you want me to improve on.
What was your Favourite part?
What do you think I could be better at?
What are your favourite type's of story to write?

Good Bye, and I hope you enjoyed my blog post, tangi pai!
- Maddison from YMS.


Friday, September 7, 2018

Ice Palace ( Part 2 )

In Rimu we have been continuing on with the Ice Palace so far I have found that it is very interesting and I am super excited to read more. Everyone in my class had to write two paragraphs and then improve them.

Turn your face into the east wind, and if you could see forever you would see Ivan’s land. It is a land where…… snow twinkles onto the faces and skins of the people and the fur of the scruffy scowling wolves. Where the wolves meet the people and the people aren't scared. A land where Ivan loves his people and they love him. You will see the sight of wolves becoming friends with the dogs, unicorns becoming friends with the dragons lions becoming friends with the lambs and people becoming friends with the people happiness becoming friends with the anger. You will see the thick deep beautiful snow that swallows everything around it with a thick icy coat of coldness. You will see Ivan clambering and destroying the snow in front of him with bright red cheeks and cold blue lips with his dark brown hair in face trying to get to the fire and the smoke to keep his people warm, you will see the sight of Ivan against the wolves and the people against the thieves and what's left of the fire and smoke from the chimneys.


Green trees slowly turning into shades of white and gray, ice hanging down from the ceiling, the soft slushy ground underneath you, you hear kids playing on skis, sleds, and snowboards sliding down steep slippery snowy mountains. The salty icy cold air in your face with the sweet smell of hot chocolate in the distance, you see packs of howling scruffy fluffy wolves. You will see a land of happiness, peace, kindness, until… the thieves turn sneaker the dragons become fierce and break out of their cages and the wolves become evil and scary the people become angry, Ivan becomes sad, hopeless and it needs to stop quickly. He can't do this on his own and he is getting weak and less powerful but no less of a hero he needs to find help from a nyone he can trust and he or she needs to come quickly.

The first part saws turn you face into the east wind and if you could see forever you would see Ivans land its a land where that was the start of the real book and we had to continue on from there, these are some photos of our class making a stop play where some people act out the scene in the book to improve our writing skills.


Please leave a comment on how I can improve my paragraphs, thank you for coming on my blog.
-Maddison.

Wednesday, September 5, 2018

Discovering our heritage

In Rimu we have been learning a lot about us and the Mauri culture and Te Reo. These are some of the more reascent things I have been doing like we have to learn new words and practice them with a friend and recorded it, we also can do a connect 4 grid of activities these are some of mine.

The first one I did was how to prepare a Hangi.














Second I made a Marae, I made mine on google slides using shapes and lines. please comment down below what you thought about my marae and another learning tool that I could use.



 I also video with my buddies, we had to practice the new words and sentences we learned in Te Reo, I found this challenging in some parts because it is hard to pronounce some words and use them in the right ways.



Thank you again for coming onto my blog and please leave me some feedback. 

Kind regards, From Maddison.


Friday, August 31, 2018

The Hoatzin


Kia ora Bloggers! For reading last week in my group we were learning about the hoatzin bird and this week we are reading about the scarlet ibis we had to do lots of activities on it and these are mine.

First:

We had to find out how a baby Hoatzin escapes danger because they can't fly yet so they make their nest above water and with their webbed claws on their wings the swim in the water and climb back in the nest.

Second: 
 This is my information web on the Hoatzins predators etc.

Third: 
 we had to make an Improved Hoatzin, I this is mine and I made it improved because it is easier to escape predators. 





Forth:

 We had to find out the meanings of 5 words and give an image to explain them.


Thank you all for coming on to my blog, please give me some feedback on what I could do better next time in a comment Thank you again.
-Maddison from YMS.





Thursday, August 30, 2018

The Ice Palace ( part 1 )



Kia Ora Bloggers! Firstly Thank you all for coming on my blog an I will very much like to read your comments but anyway, in Rimu ( My Class) at YMS we have been learning and reading Narratives at the moment we are making our own Narrative and we are getting Ideas from Robert swindles Ice Palace we have written our intro and build up and I have enjoyed it so far. We needed to make a brainstorm on what we are going to the write and the setting and describing words and this is mine. 
How it feels.

Bumpy, Hard, Soft, Cold Cracking, Crunching.     Slowly, the snow falls to the ground.
In the mountains, the winds swirl around my hair.     
I fall on Slippery skis from underneath me.     The icy water slowly leaks into my gloves and my cold icy hands
 
How It Smells, Wet, Cold, Icy.
Frozen, Frosty ground around me.
Astonished at the amount of snow and ice everywhere over the mountaintop.

How it tastes.
Cold wet water.
The wind as wild as an angry bull.
The sun and snow fighting for hours.             

It looks.
The field plastered with a thick layer of snow



After Rimu did that we had to make 3 sentences on the setting and what we would see we had to add it on to the starting sentence in the real book then compare ours to his the starting sentence was “Turn your face into the east wind, and if you could see forever you would see Ivan’s land. It is a land where...”

My Sentence.


  1. Where… snow twinkles onto the skins of the people and the fur of the wolves.


2. Where… the thick deep beautiful snow swallows everything around it with a thick coat of coldness.


3. Where.. The wolves meet the people and the people aren't scared of the wolves, a land where Ivan loves his people and they love him.





This a picture of the cover of the book please comment on what you think is going to happen.





I would love to see you Ideas for an icy landscampe and please give me some feed back on my sentinces.

Bye have an amazing day
-Maddison.