Thursday, November 15, 2018

My Free Writing!

Today I have finshed of my free writeing called the ghost and I really am proud of this work. I think that it is funny and so cute and I love the little ghost.
Please tell me what you think because I just love it. Please give me feedback on the quality of the slide and the story, the process was simple I found the cute photo and decided to make a story about it then I made the charter and through all of the stories. I really hope you enjoy this as much as I did. Goodbye!

This is my slide, Enjoy!

From Maddie at YMS.


  1. Hi my name is Chase really like that you used your capitall and full stop

  2. Hello my name is kerry from kawakawa primary school.

    This caught my eyes as quick as i saw it. i like how you used you words to hook your reader in. You can try make little scenes showing whats happening beside your writing. Its so cute how you made the ghost so smol.


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